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Some children spend hours every day on smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Today, following improving technology people are using new advice specifically camera phones ,
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 we can see that
children
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 are using camera phones a
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 of times in their days . There are some causes that why
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 are using smart technology a
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.
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,
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 don’t have enough entertainment ,
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, their parents don’t bring them to parks to play with other
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 facilities.
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 ,
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 should learn useful skills in different areas from
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's classes to have no free
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 to play with mobile
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 to They can find new friends there .
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, some parents aren’t managing their
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's activities.
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 have to be guided by their parents on how they should use mobile and of course how much they can spend their
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 on smart devices. In my view, it is not suitable for
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 that are using smart devices a
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 of times of day , and It has some reasons , for ,example
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 should have body activity and useful exercise. they have to earn different experiences .they should find new friends and play with them. If
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 use smartphones a
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 ,their minds may be ill and it is dangerous for their health ,
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 new devices have bad effects on the focus ability of
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 and they can not learn their lessons well. In conclusion, we say
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 why
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 are using mobile a
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 of
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 of day . ,
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 we find it is not useful for
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 that spend most of their
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 with mobile .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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