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Life now is better than 100 years ago. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Interestingly, modern life is easier to live than it was 100
years
 ago. Compared to 100
years
 ago, many things have changed in
technology
. I agree that technological advances have brought about tremendous changes and that the world is safe.
First
, industrialization's evolution has produced numerous products for
people
 to live healthily. For 100
years
, they developed medical
technology
.
As a result
, they can heal by a doctor safely using new medical
technology
 if they are unhealthy. Unfortunately, so many
people
 died by disease 100
years
 ago.
For example
, it was common for
people
 to die of a cold in the past. So,
people
 in the past thought the cold was a dangerous disease.
However
, now that medical
technology
 has advanced, it is not difficult to treat colds. Compared to 100
years
 ago, advances in medical
technology
 saved and cured many
people
.
Second
, 100
years
 ago, the continuing world war drove
people
 into anxiety.
People
 with the strongest army ruled the nation, and their citizens were controlled by fear.
However
, 100
years
 later, peacekeeping is essential, and there is little fear of war among citizens. The United Nations Association agreed on all peace, and it was possible to strengthen military power.
However
, it was impossible to indiscriminately occupy other countries so that the
people
 could live safely. All things considered, it is true that life is better today.
Nevertheless
, just as
people
 in the past have worked together for 100
years
 to create a better world, we must develop more for the future and break boundaries that were previously believed to be the maximum potential of humans.
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