You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other you don't fully agree with this opinion. write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter say which points in the article you agree with explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers Offered to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article
Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m writing
this
letter with regards
to the article you published in the national Fix the agreement mistake
regard
news paper
about town centres in my country looking very similar.
I agree that with globalization and population increase most problems may be the same, Correct your spelling
newspaper
such
as traffic and pollution, each city has its own peculiarities.
The city where I have been living for over 25 years is a clear example of that. Here at Bagayam ,Vellore the medical college built during the times of it’s
founder, Dr Ida Scudder is more than 100 years old and was Replace the word
its
build
with brick limestones. So it is possible to observe a vintage atmosphere in the beautiful architecture. Wrong verb form
built
In addition
, the road leading to Bagayam is lined with trees on both sides, thus
maintaining a pleasent
climate even during the summer when compared to other centres. Correct your spelling
pleasant
In addition
to that
there are numerous parks here with benches for people to sit, becoming a pleasant place to spend time with friends and family.
All those factors are not seen in all town centres from my perspective. So Add a comma
that,
that is
why I would love to offer you a tour of my city with me as a guide.
Thanks for your consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Paul.Submitted by pauljoshisurendar on
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task achievement
Make sure to proofread for minor grammatical errors, such as the misuse of 'it’s' which should be 'its' and 'build' which should be 'built'.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph develops a single main idea in a more organized manner. For example, dedicating different paragraphs to traffic & pollution, the unique features of Bagayam, and the offer for a tour would improve clarity.
task achievement
The letter addresses all parts of the question comprehensively and engages the reader with specific examples.
task achievement
The tone is polite and appropriate for a letter to a newspaper editor, reflecting a balanced and respectful disagreement with the article.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure is clear and easy to follow, with a logical flow from agreement to specific local features and the offer for a tour.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite