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Some businesses observe that people who just finished college have a hard time interacting with colleagues in working as a team. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are your suggestions to address this problem?

For young specialists, it can be a problem to adapt to a new
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 environment and make a relationship with their colleagues.
Such
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 difficulties occur mostly because of a lack of experience. Employers should be interested in helping new employees interact with a collective because it improves the efficiency of a
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.
This
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 essay will discuss what reasons cause a difficult interaction and will suggest possible solutions. As it was previously mentioned, the problem of adapting based on
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insufficient experience.
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, it regards the experience of working in a
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.
While
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 studying in college, students generally learn how to handle different tasks by themselves
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 of working together. Afterwards, they are not able to deal with their first real
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 tasks because of are used to doing it alone.
Secondly
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, the skill gap between juniors and senior workers can produce misunderstandings between them.
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, interns in a hospital are not enough sure about the locations and names of every room, and if their more skilled colleagues ask them to bring something quickly, probably, interns will be not able to find it so it will create a conflict.
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, both soft
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 and proficiency play the main role in interacting with a
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team
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. The possible solutions can be increasing attention to soft
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 during education for the first case and setting the adaptive period on a new job for the second case.
To begin
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 with the first one, teachers should suggest more
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 tasks so it stimulates students to
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 together.
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, it can be "debate exercises" where people defend their opinion but
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 change it. As regards the
work
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 environment, employers should give time to new workers to adapt and to get to know their
team
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 workers more closely. These simple steps help young specialists to interact better. To summarize, new employees can face difficulties in terms of interacting with a new
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 because of insufficient soft
skills
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 or confidence in a new workplace. Improving their communicative
skills
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 during education and gentle introduction to a collective can be solutions.

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task response
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and support it with examples.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use linking words to connect your ideas better.
introduction
The introduction clearly states the problem and the essay's purpose.
examples
You used specific examples to illustrate your points, which helps clarify your ideas.

Your opinion

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