Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and tam working skills are more important. Discuss both the sides.

People have different perspectives
whether
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the school
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school
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schools
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should teach
children
to compete or work in
group
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a group
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as a
team
. While some people think that
school
should focus more on competitive
skills
,
others
believe that it is better for
children
to learn to cooperate and work in
group
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a group
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.
To begin
with,
children
who compete against
others
often do well in
school
, said
by
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some.
In other words
, competition among
children
motivate
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motivates
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them and
encourage
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encourages
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them to perform better than their counterparts.
Furthermore
, competition is considered to be the most highly regarded skill around the world as in the real world these
children
tend to compete for a job in the job market and success is entirely
depended
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on how they outclass their competitors.
For example
, a study conducted by the University of Sydney in 2009 concluded that if there is any prize for a winner in any competition
then
they gave their 100% to win that prize.
Thus
,
this
makes
the
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competitive skill even more important.
Secondly
, it is
also
of immense importance that
children
should learn to cooperate and work in
team
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as one. As most of the
time
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these
children
might indulge in activities that could only be achieved via
group
word
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work
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.
Moreover
, schools prepare
children
for their future and
industry
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value
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values
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skills
as key
skills
for meeting goals and deadlines.
For instance
, most organisations have multiple staff and without each
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others
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support organisations might suffer in their smooth operation. Just like a cricket
team
, where individual performances are useless if other
team
members do not perform. In conclusion, many people consider that competitive
skills
should be taught in
school
, whereas,
others
think that cooperative and
group
skills
should be given more preference.
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