Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school. Others, however, say that cooperation and tam working skills are more important. Discuss both the sides.
People have different perspectives
whether
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on whether
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the school
a school
school
should teach Fix the agreement mistake
schools
children
to compete or work in group
as a Correct article usage
a group
team
. While some people think that school
should focus more on competitive skills
, others
believe that it is better for children
to learn to cooperate and work in group
.
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a group
the group
To begin
with, children
who compete against others
often do well in school
, said by
some. Change preposition
to
In other words
, competition among children
motivate
them and Correct subject-verb agreement
motivates
encourage
them to perform better than their counterparts. Correct subject-verb agreement
encourages
Furthermore
, competition is considered to be the most highly regarded skill around the world as in the real world these children
tend to compete for a job in the job market and success is entirely depended
on how they outclass their competitors. Replace the word
dependent
For example
, a study conducted by the University of Sydney in 2009 concluded that if there is any prize for a winner in any competition then
they gave their 100% to win that prize. Thus
, this
makes the
competitive skill even more important.
Correct article usage
apply
Secondly
, it is also
of immense importance that children
should learn to cooperate and work in team
as one. As most of the Add an article
a team
time
these Add a comma
,time
children
might indulge in activities that could only be achieved via group
word
. Correct your spelling
work
Moreover
, schools prepare children
for their future and industry
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the industry
value
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values
this
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these
skills
as key skills
for meeting goals and deadlines. For instance
, most organisations have multiple staff and without each Change to a genitive case
other's
others
support organisations might suffer in their smooth operation. Just like a cricket Add a comma
,others
team
, where individual performances are useless if other team
members do not perform.
In conclusion, many people consider that competitive skills
should be taught in school
, whereas, others
think that cooperative and group
skills
should be given more preference.Submitted by anilkarmani1 on
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