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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and what solutions can be suggested? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

#levels #youth #crime #cities #world
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concern
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this
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matter that
teenager
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teenagers
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 engaged
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crime
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a crime
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.
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Todays
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 the world has
increased
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the
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teenager
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crime
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teenager
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teenagers
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 are addicted
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drug
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drugs
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 easily.
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, mostly
lower income
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 families under 18 ages boys do
crime
.
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a teenager
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teenager
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 family can not full fill their demand
this
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college
 boys go to do
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crime
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crimes
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.
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, Ekttar television published a report and that report Ekattar said in
Mirpur
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the Mirpur
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 area youth
crime
 rate
too
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 much because
this
 place is living poor people extremely.
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the parents
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parents
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 and
children
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generation
 gap is one reason.
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,
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today's
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generation
use
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 social media and
in
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online they meet new people every day.
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,
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lack
leack
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lack
 of knowledge
parents
 can not check with whom
his
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children
 are talking. As
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a
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as
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 result, young engage with bad
peoples
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people
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 do crimes.
On the other hand
, Scool,
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and college
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college
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colleges
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 can solve young demand.
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School
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Schools
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,
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and college
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college
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colleges
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 can give free education, and create
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a job
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job
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 in
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scholl
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school
 or
college
. Students will do
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job
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this
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 places, and they get some. Students will use
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 as
his
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 hand consumption. Many developed
country
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countries
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 do
this
,
such
 as America.
Furthermore
,
Parents
 need to restrictions
on
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apply
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his
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their
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children
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children's
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using
useing
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using
internet
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the internet
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.
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 mean,
Parents
 should always monitor. When their
children
 will use
internet
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the internet
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parents
 should seats near
his
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their
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children
. In conclusion, Poverty and
generation
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the generation
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children
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of children
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 with his family
is
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are
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 reason to do
crime
 young
generation
.
However
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with
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school
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schools
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,
college
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colleges
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 and
parents
 can solve
this
 problem.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surge
  • productive activities
  • quality education
  • social media
  • peer pressure
  • economic disparity
  • disadvantaged backgrounds
  • legitimate means
  • inclusive education
  • mentorship
  • community policing
  • youth engagement
  • early intervention
  • constructive pathways
  • social services
  • at-risk families
  • root causes
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