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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, exchanging international
students
 is debatable.
Although
 there is a number of benefits to
this
 trend, I believe the drawbacks involved are more. On the plus side, the advantages for
schools
, which the most
students
 there are international, are manifold.
To begin
 with, they can approve many applicants from many countries whose
students
 cannot study at high-level
schools
.
Thus
, they probably cannot become an expert in future when the level of competition goes up more and more, and
this
 inequality could be a crisis all over the world. Take Iran's education system which can not be helpful for many teenagers as the most patently obvious example; one Iranian student can achieve more quality learning in abroad than their homeland. Cultural diversity,
furthermore
, could it be the
second
 positive factor that
schools
 gain it. In most cases, there is obvious that when various cultures and traditions come together the results could be better.
However
, exchanging international
students
 has serious consequences. The most axiomatic argument is a financial problem.
that is
 to say, when
schools
 have international
students
, they probably have to expend more money compared to domestic
schools
. Considering that most of the
students
 migrate without their parents, providing suitable chambers for them will a lot cost.
for instance
, building a usual accommodation with common equipment, that must construct near the school's building, might cost an arm and a leg.
Moreover
, more international
students
 lead to hiring
the
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more experts. They strive to help teenagers to avoid mental disorders stemming from their age or their distance from the homeland, and
also
 to tackle different languages. In conclusion, regardless of benefits, I think resulting of international student exchange can be more problematic for all
schools
 as their financial problems and hiring experts.
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