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Some people say educational success is because of good teachers where as others say it depends on students. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education
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 is a basic need of modern society. The question is, who is behind the success of
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 It is always a debatable topic that has become more controversial when many people claim that good teachers are behind the advance while others believe that achievement depends on children. I believe both are equally important for real accomplishment. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will elaborate on both notions
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 leading to a logical conclusion. On one hand, teachers are the founder of
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, they are the role model of scions.
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, kids at younger ages always consider that their teachers are always right and they have faith in them. It is easy for a pathfinder to mould the young generation into beneficial citizens.
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 the boom of schooling.
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, the best instructor not only focuses on academic studies but
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 on all the areas of development as well including moral values. To clear that a tutor can nurture tomorrow’s honest and empathetic leaders.
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, without any arguments, I can say the success of edification is completely based on the attitude of students.
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, the teacher has taken efforts to bring up a child, it would be a waste if the children are not ready to understand. The level of thought process is completely unique from individual to individual anyone can’t change. So, youngsters
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 play a vital role to attain a successful learning process. To conclude, kids and instructors play an equal role in the achievement of
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. I strongly believe they are just like both sides of a coin, one side cannot be ignored.
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