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Some people believe that education is the key to tackling hunger worldwide while others feel that the answer is in food aid. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #education #hunger #food #aid
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There has been
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 divergence of opinion that
education
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 is the best way to solve worldwide
hunger
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,
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however
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 others believe that it can be
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solved
 by
food
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aid
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 only. I firmly support the former notion and I consider
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 is the key to tack;
ing
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hunger
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.
This
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details
detail
deatils
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detail
.
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food
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aid
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 is
good
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 option to
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solve
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slove
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solve
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 the
hunger
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 issue, because those
people
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 who are not able to find
food
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 or do not have an
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opportunity
opoprotunity
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opportunity
 to get more
some
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nutrition
nutrion
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nutrition
,
suffers
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 from
lack
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 of it . Communities
who
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 help
for
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this
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people
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 are heroes in our days, perhaps the problem of
hunger
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 leads to
death
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the death
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 of
population
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the population
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. To illustrate, in some places in Africa biggest problem is
lack
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the lack
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 of water and subsistence, and statistics
shows
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 that
people
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 in
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this
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 locations die from
hunger
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 more than other reasons of death.
Food
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aid
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 saved a lot of souls.
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, commonalty can not help
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people
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 who are “hungry” forever.
Food
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aid
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 can help only for short time
,
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 because
food
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 resources are running out rapidly. There is another variant to solve
lack
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the lack
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 of
food
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 -
education
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.
Education
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 is definitely a major breakthrough in order to reduce world
hunger
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. If a man is well educated
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then they
 are most likely able to get a job.
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,reducing the amount of homeless or less privileged individuals can easily lessen the rate of the
hunger
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 problem in one country.Other than that,a well-educated country or society is the one most likely to offer a helping hand to other
people
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 since they are well knowledged about world issues.
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,research has shown about 60% of
hunger
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 problems are centred around illiterate countries. To conclude,despite
food
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aid
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 being an effective solution but
education
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 is the
first
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 and the ultimate key to ending world
hunger
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 in a more effective way.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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