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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 day and age, technology has transformed the ways of communication and influenced relationships in many forms. Technology has some negative aspects due to reduced security in some cases, while, its impact on people’s lives has been largely positive
such
 as remote communication and the reasons will be outlined in
this
 essay. On the one hand, one of the major benefits that a common human has is that develop close bonds with relatives hailing in
the
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other countries.
Moreover
, by the use of social networks could stay
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with
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 their loved ones, who stay away from them through methods like video calls, voice calls and etc.
For instance
, one of my friends, who has gone to Canada two years ago, still is in
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 with me because of the internet.
In contrast
, folks used to stand in a queue for long hours to say hello to their family and friends.
In addition
, they were never able to have their virtual visual.
On the other hand
, there are various demerits which could not be spared. To commence with, juveniles are seen adding unknown persons to their chatting apps which could be dangerous.
This
 is because the physical identity of that individual is unknown as an adult could act fake. By the way of example, about 7 years ago, the news showed in America that a girl was robbed by a boy, whom she met on Facebook
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 when they decided to see each other physically. In a nutshell,
although
, the Internet may be dangerous for the safety of some people, especially teenagers, it
also
 offers benefits
such
 as long-distance communication.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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