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Now a lot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourage them to learn vocational skills. Do you agree or disagree.

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We are in an age of time, where education is the most important part of
life
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. People are focusing on schooling and neglecting the
skills
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 that can help them survive in difficult economic situations.
This
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 essay shades light on the topic of why vocational
skills
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 are important. In today's world, mankind is witnessing the rapid change of technology and
also
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 creating new jobs that need skilled manpower. Most
students
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 in educational institutes do a lot of coursework and are unable to learn vocational
skills
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 because of insufficient knowledge about the job market. With the passing of every year more and more jobs are looking for candidates who can work by hand
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 the growing industry of electric cars needs more than 70 per cent of their workforce who can work with physical things like electric motors and control circuits. Universities should encourage their
students
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 to learn vocational
skills
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 by making some vocational courses mandatory;
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 companies should offer college
students
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 to work and learn some
skills
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 that will be helpful to secure a good job in the market.
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, some actions need to be taken by governments to help promote
students
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 to enrol in vocational courses. In the end, I would say to be successful in practical
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 a person should not only rely on his education but learn some
skills
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 that can be fruitful to earn good money. As mentioned above in present times combination of academic qualification and vocational education is a must part of
life
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 to grow and be successful in
life
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.
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