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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Environmental issues are a global concern, with many arguing that the pollution caused by
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 problems increases
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costs
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. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 view.
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 of all, there are many reasons why raising gas prices was a mistake and cannot fix any problem. Rising
fuel
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costs
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 affect many gas-using industries
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 as manufacturing and delivery.
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, the cost of essential goods must increase, consumers are more difficult to access, and quality of life is significantly reduced.
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, the price of imported clothing has spiked due to increased transportation
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, especially higher
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. So many people cannot afford the clothes they need.
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, a group of people think that increasing
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 prices will encourage people to use electric cars and public transport more. I believe
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 is a good point of view but it does not completely solve the problem.
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, finding new sustainable energy sources suitable for transportation will be a better way to overcome the environmental problem. In summary, reducing
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costs
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 is not a good option to deal with global issues
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 as the environment.
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, it can lead to unpredictable consequences
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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