Despite huge improvements in healthcare, the overall standard of physical health in many developed countries is now falling. What could be the reason for this trend, and what can be done to reverse it?

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It is claimed that the rate of physical health in wealthy countries is decreasing;
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, they experience high-quality healthcare.
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essay will discuss the reasons and the solution towards
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trend. The main reason for the unpleasant standard of physical health is the fast pace of lifestyle in developed countries,
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the quality of healthcare is high. In the modern world, most
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are experiencing busy lifestyles, so they prefer to eat pre-prepared
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like fast
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. Obviously, the ingredients of these
foods
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include
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high
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of salt and saturated fat which leads to obesity.
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,
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most of the time are working and they are acclimatized to the machinery lifestyle.
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, most citizens use their own car to arrive at their workplace, they use elevators to reach their offices and they just seat on chairs and work.
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type of work
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consuming unhealthy
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is harmful to the human body.
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, the quality of physical health falls. There is a significant solution to
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problem and that relies mostly on the government.
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, the government not only can increase the tax on unhealthy
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but
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is able to fund healthy
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. In
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,way the price of junk
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will increase
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to healthy
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.
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,
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prefer to have more healthy
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rather than fast
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.
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, the government should provide low price gyms for their employees. So, the workforce is encouraged to participate in the gym to have physical exercise as a hobby at a lower price. In summary, the new lifestyle of
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living in developed countries makes them have not a high standard of a healthy body and
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issue can be addressed by the government’s decision.
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