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It could be argued that technology makes our lives easier and simpler. But there are certainly people who feel life has become more complicated due to modern inventions. Which opinion do you agree with? In your essay, include supporting details.

#technology #lives #people #life #inventions
People are divided on the opinion,
whether
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 technical advancement can make our
life
 smooth or it
make
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 our
life
 more complex. I
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believe
beleive
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believe
 that
the
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technical upgradation makes our
life
 way easier which helps us to ignore the complex side of technology. In the following paragraphs, I am going to discuss
about
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the role of technology to make our
life
 better. There
are
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 numerous technological
invention
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 that made our
life
 comfortable.
Firstly
, we can talk about the
invention
 of
mobile
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the mobile
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 phone. Before, the
invention
 of mobile people had to communicate via telegrams or
telephone
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 which wasn't accessible all the time. The
invention
 of
mobile
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 phone made
revolution
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 in communication & made it comfortable.
Secondly
, to talk about the
invention
 of
5
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G internet is needless.
For instance
,
to download
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 a movie
it
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used to take almost a day before.
However
, 5G internet has made it possible to download any sort of data, within a
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minute
minitue
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minute
 or two. At the same time,
invention
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an invention
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 like artificial
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intelligence
inteliggence
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intelligence
 has made it possible to drive
a
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 car without any driver.
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, one can commute to his office without thinking about traffic signals, while reading a newspaper. According to some research, the rate of road accidents will go down significantly if automated cars are
being
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used.
Additionally
, gadgets like
smartphone
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the smartphone
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has
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 made it possible to confine the whole world
on to
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 the palm of
human
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a human
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 being. Smartphones combined with
internet
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 allows us to order our food,
ride
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and ride
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 according to our need.
Thus
, technological advancement helps us to save
our
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valuable time. To conclude, it can be reiterated that
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modern
mordern
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modern
 technology has made our
life
 significantly easier by constantly solving our problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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