People who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is true that many
people
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around the world provoke their own sickness. Obviously, there are many reasons for
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,
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as unhygienic
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, unscheduled way of life, uncontrolled
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of alcohol and smoking cigarettes, so they should pay more for health care. Personally, I don’t agree with
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point of view, as these
people
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have to buy the necessary drugs if they want to live and not everyone has
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possibility.
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essay will extensively explain the reasons to support my opinion based on
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examples.
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with, an increasing number of
people
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indulge in eating fast
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, drinking and refrain from
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lifestyle and eventually become obese, have heart issues and diseases like diabetes.
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, those adults are repeat visitors to healthcare institutions. For
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reason, rather than making the pay high fitness premiums, we should encourage them joining to the gym, yoga or Zumba classes, to explain
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the importance of healthy
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etc.
One
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recent research indicates that a great number of folks don’t really care about eating healthy
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they prefer spending their money on junk
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.
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clearly shows that if the problem
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without management, so you can forget about
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lifestyle.
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, it must be concluded that
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of all, healthcare is a
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important thing.
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to
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, the inner self will be satisfactory only when
people
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’s external side
invest
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the best items
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mind and stomach.
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, we can’t compare two persons’ situations, when
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of them eats only fresh
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and opposite other
one
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eats unclean
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every day. The supplied example makes it clear that the
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person will pay more for
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health respectively. The link between them is
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clear. In a nutshell, after analyzing the above. It can be concluded that each person is responsible for their own health and should take care
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it.
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, rather than feel apathy about diets and unhealthy
lifestyle
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, many
people
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are suffering from their complexes. It is my “Tinkerbelle’s hope” that
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one day
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long-waited hero will come and become treat illnesses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burden
  • lifestyle-related diseases
  • healthcare systems
  • personal responsibility
  • preventable diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • ethical considerations
  • penalizing
  • discrimination
  • socio-economic groups
  • deterrent
  • health education
  • financial penalties
  • health inequalities
  • access to healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health goals
  • promoting healthy lifestyles
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