People who cause their own illnesses through unhealthy lifestyles and poor diets should have to pay more for health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is true that many
people
around the world provoke their own sickness. Obviously, there are many reasons for
this
,
such
as unhygienic
food
, unscheduled way of life, uncontrolled
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of alcohol and smoking cigarettes, so they should pay more for health care. Personally, I don’t agree with
this
point of view, as these
people
have to buy the necessary drugs if they want to live and not everyone has
this
possibility.
This
essay will extensively explain the reasons to support my opinion based on
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examples.
To begin
with, an increasing number of
people
indulge in eating fast
food
, drinking and refrain from
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lifestyle and eventually become obese, have heart issues and diseases like diabetes.
Consequently
, those adults are repeat visitors to healthcare institutions. For
this
reason, rather than making the pay high fitness premiums, we should encourage them joining to the gym, yoga or Zumba classes, to explain
them
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the importance of healthy
food
etc.
One
recent research indicates that a great number of folks don’t really care about eating healthy
food
they prefer spending their money on junk
food
.
This
clearly shows that if the problem
continuous
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without management, so you can forget about
healthy
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lifestyle.
Thus
, it must be concluded that
first
of all, healthcare is a
vital
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important thing.
In addition
to
this
, the inner self will be satisfactory only when
people
’s external side
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the best items
to
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mind and stomach.
For instance
, we can’t compare two persons’ situations, when
one
of them eats only fresh
food
and opposite other
one
eats unclean
food
every day. The supplied example makes it clear that the
second
person will pay more for
this
health respectively. The link between them is
thus
clear. In a nutshell, after analyzing the above. It can be concluded that each person is responsible for their own health and should take care
about
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it.
Thereafter
, rather than feel apathy about diets and unhealthy
lifestyle
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, many
people
are suffering from their complexes. It is my “Tinkerbelle’s hope” that
one day
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long-waited hero will come and become treat illnesses.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • burden
  • lifestyle-related diseases
  • healthcare systems
  • personal responsibility
  • preventable diseases
  • healthcare costs
  • ethical considerations
  • penalizing
  • discrimination
  • socio-economic groups
  • deterrent
  • health education
  • financial penalties
  • health inequalities
  • access to healthcare
  • preventive medicine
  • public health goals
  • promoting healthy lifestyles
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