There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year. While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, many people believe that other measures will be needed. Discuss both sides.

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Recently, there has been a significant increase in the worst committed crimes. Many believe the death penalty is the best solution, while others consider different answers.
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, benefits from it include avoidance of murders and lowering the
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of maintenance of inmates.
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, what if the sentence was wrong? The introduction of the death penalty is the worst possible punishment that a judge can make. Many people feel
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the answer to the issue of criminals like serial killers because if they know about it, they may have
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thoughts before committing a crime. It's a kind of prevention. Individuals
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believe that's a way to lower the
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of maintenance of prisoners. Prisons generate
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which had to be covered by public taxes. If we eliminated the number of inmates, the national budget would recover.
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, societies asked in the survey believe that lowering the
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of running prisons are necessary.
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, everyone deserves a
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chance, no matter what actions did in the past. Inmates are people who should have an opportunity to change. There was a famous serial killer, Jaffrey Dahmer, who decided to get baptised when he was in prison. There is
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the problem of wrong sentences. What if the judge accuses the suspect of something which wasn't true? In case of that, there won't be a return. That happened mainly in the past.
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, there always is a possibility. In conclusion, the death penalty is the most severe type of punishment. The positives are preventing people from committing murders and revealing to the budget,
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it contains negatives
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as taking away the possibility to change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deterrent
  • recidivism
  • rehabilitation
  • ethical considerations
  • economic factors
  • social factors
  • community policing
  • public opinion
  • recidivism rates
  • community-driven initiatives
  • modern policing methods
  • death penalty
  • serious crimes
  • crime rates
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