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Many companies are developing electronic books. Some people think these books will replace paper books in the future. To what extent do you agree.

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Nowadays many firms are evolving electronic
books
. Some individuals believe that
this
 can lead to the replacement of
paper
books
. In my opinion, e-
books
 offer several advantages over printed
books
 and can replace them in the future. It is my view that
,
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 electronic
books
 are more accessible as you can read them anywhere and at any time.
For instance
, there are lots of heavy
books
 with so many pages that you cannot carry with you.
This
 issue can easily be solved by using mobile apps that provide these
books
.
Moreover
, audiobooks are a useful feature in these apps and people can listen to their favorite
books
while
 they are walking or driving their cars. Another important reason is that e-
books
 are cheaper than
paper
books
 because they do not need
paper
 and
therefore
, do not harm the environment. There is a good chance that
this
technology
 will take over the use of printed
books
 in the future.
In contrast
, some people claim that using
paper
books
 is unavoidable. They insist that not everyone has the ability to use smartphones with high
technology
 that provides electronic
books
.
However
, I do not find
this
 argument convincing as these days most people have mobiles and tablets or other forms of
technology
.
Also
, using
e-
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books
 applications is more economical compared to printed
books
, since you can access thousands of
books
. In conclusion, I completely agree with the use of electronic
books
 because they are more convenient and environmentally friendly. I believe that his
technology
 will replace printed
books
 in the future.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure a variety of sentence structures to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
While providing examples, aim to elaborate a bit more on how they directly impact the topic discussed.
Task Achievement
Provide a counterargument in more detail and develop it further to strengthen your position.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing the main argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Logical paragraph structure, with each paragraph addressing a single clear point.
Task Achievement
Good use of specific examples, like discussing ebook mobility and affordability, to support the main points.
Task Achievement
Staying focused on the topic by clearly stating your opinion and providing supporting arguments throughout the essay.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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