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Some people think that robots are very important to human's future development, while others believe they are dangerous and negatively affect society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people believe that
robots
 have adverse influences on society and can be threatened human well-being. Others argue that
robots
 and all kinds of mechanical machines are a vital role in our life and future development. In
this
 essay, both sides’ arguments will be discussed, and I believe that
robots
 are beneficial to us if we use them properly.
To begin
 with, some people think that
robots
 can be used as weapons in war and cause enormous casualties and loss of lives. Some developed countries are developing technology that uses
robots
 or other automatic machines to control the bombs or detect the enemy location for other massive attacks. If those weapon machines were mass-manufactured, more wars would occur.
However
, I would argue that auto-machine can enhance productivity and efficiency. Nowadays, some hospitals invented a robotic nurse to help patients to take blood tests or even used them in some surgeries. It can be speeding up the blood test process and become more accurate and diminish medical-error probabilities. Artificial intelligence is
also
 commonly used in business to organize and deal with different sets of tasks. It improves analytics and resource utilization, resulting in significant cost reductions. It can
also
 automate complex processes and minimize downtime by predicting maintenance needs. In conclusion, it is undeniable that some county sees
robots
 as massive weapons, but we can have more regulations on developing these weapons. I strongly believe that
robots
 play a crucial role in our daily life, it brings plenty of benefits to our society if we use them well, and they can lighten up the human future.
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