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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A great number of politics advocate that the most crucial aim for them is economic advance whereas others believe that there are more aims as essential to states as economic improvements, I disagree with the latter statement since,to maintain different improvements
such
 as education or productivity, the financial states of lands are the only way to do so.
First
 and foremost, it is clear that, in our contemporary world, nations are measured by their education levels and productivity of them when compared. In detail, the education provided by the governments in schools and their number of well-educated citizens as worker population should be adequate for the country. On top of that, domestic production is massively important as well due to the fact that the countries do not need to import goods
such
 as food or clothes from other nations
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 independent production.
However
, even if these assessment items are important for the countries, they cannot be sustained without financial subsidies which are catered by the governments.
That is
 why the economic progress of nations is more important than others in order to keep maintaining
further
 developments in their lands.
Furthermore
, the financial strengths of countries are concerning citizens since they are used for public services,
for instance
, public hospitals,public transport or child supports. To put it simply, even though some people advocate that other signs of progress should be considered with economic progress as identical, the authority thinks economical improvement is unique when it comes to
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 which I agree with since the others’ existence are dependent on the financial support of the governments.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • standard of living
  • sustainable development
  • social equality
  • environmental degradation
  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
  • human development index
  • holistic approach
  • quality of life
  • economic prosperity
  • healthcare system
  • education system
  • cultural diversity
  • policy decisions
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