Obesity is now a major global epidemic. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem?

Nowadays, one of the global issues that young and elderly people face is
obesity
. It may be either due to
time
spent sitting in front of a net or following a diet. Apart from the causes of ,
obesity
it has adverse effects on the community
that is
suffering from it. To solve
this
issue, suggested limiting screen
time
and avoiding junk food.
First
of all, keep track of the
time
, that children spend watching TV. offspring do not know the
time
, which should be spent watching television, and because of
this
parents
have to restrict their
time
, spent in front of the screen.
Also
,
parents
should try to spend more
time
outside with their children, as
isit
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it
beneficial for both sides. Walking on a regular basis will keep fit in both age groups,
however
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at the same ,term
parents
should monitor the child's nutrition.
Last
but not the least, limit unhealthy foods in the household. If
parents
bring unhealthy foods into the household, children may be more likely to eat them. Even though, we all know about the negative impact of those foods, we could not avoid them because of their lip-smacking taste and delicious appearance. The truth behind
that is
, used several aromas and artificial appearances, will malfunction our hormones and, probably, lead to
obesity
. Avoiding
this
kind of product will keep people slim enough. In conclusion, restricting screen
time
and avoiding unhealthy food, will probably keep people fit. In my ,opinion the best way to reduce
obesity
in the world, is to follow a healthy diet from childhood. Because what diet scions follow from the beginning would have an impact on their health in future.
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