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Housing is essential for people . Some argu that government should offer free housing for people who can not afford it.do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Accommodation is one of the most important things one must have. Nowadays, concerned citizens raise their voices so that
government
 provide housing facilities to the homeless. Personally, I completely agree with that and in the subsequent paragraphs,
i
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 will be reasoning my stands.
To begin
 with, habitat is prioritized after food as one's basic right and it is
government's
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the government's
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 responsibility to ensure dwellings for all its citizens. Despite the responsibility of the
government
, individuals with minimum earnings ensure residency for their families .
However
, many
family
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families
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 remain homeless due to poor financial conditions.
For example
, many
rickshaw-pullers
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 in the city area stay at the roadside for the night as they can not afford living space in any residential area with their limited income.
Therefore
, the
government
 should facilitate
such
 low-income people with low-budget housing where they can stay at night cost-free or spend
a small amounts
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. Another point worth mentioning is that there are some migrants who face difficulties in availing accommodation mostly due to the socio-cultural differences with the dwellers of the new place they moved
.
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For instance
, Rohingyas who escaped from Myanmar to Bangladesh following violations by the Burmese faced great miseries living in Chittagong areas as local people did not accept their arrival warmly.
Consequently
, a huge number of
population
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the population
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 stayed under the sky for several days which is quite inhumane.
Hence
, only
state
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 can help those helpless
community
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communities
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 to live under protection by constructing housing facilities so that they can have some times to restart their lives. In conclusion, it can be reiterated that authorities should take
the
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responsibility to provide residential safety to the people in need since fulfilling the basic human rights of each citizen is the holy liability of the
government
 of every nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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