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Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of their lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is an ever-increase in
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 of
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. There is a contentious argument over whether or not modern
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 is beneficial for mankind.
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 many think that
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 has a bad impact on our
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, I firmly believe that its pros are more significant than its cons.
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cutting-edge
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 has become a big part of our
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 to the point where
people
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 can not imagine life without it.
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 is because
people
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 say that it is taking control over their
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. To elucidate
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, if
people
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themselves
themseleves
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themselves
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, there will be almost no physical interaction with other
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 which can lead to adverse ramifications.
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, a recent study has shown that the 90% of
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 use mobile phones as
platform
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 to connect with
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 which
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affect
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 their confidence level.
On the other hand
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, society
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claims
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 that
technology
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 particularly
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the internet
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 advantages are more than its disadvantages. Due to
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technology
teachnology
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technology
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people
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lives
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has
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have
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 become
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convenient
convienent
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convenient
. They can buy things at
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 touch of
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 button and gain access to information from all over the world.
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,
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play
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 a crucial role in schools. Education is now easier than before due to
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 and every child has access to it. To illustrate, students were able to study at home during Covid due to the
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technology
techology
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technology
. In conclusion, according to my perspective,
technology
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 have more positive points and if
people
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 use it to improve the world
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overusing
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over using
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 it, it can be
good
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a good
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 development.
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