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Some people fear that technology is gradually taking over control of our lives, while others think that it has led to many positive developments in all aspects of their lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is an ever-increase in
use
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 of
technology
. There is a contentious argument over whether or not modern
technology
 is beneficial for mankind.
Although
 many think that
technology
 has a bad impact on our
lives
, I firmly believe that its pros are more significant than its cons.
This
 essay will not shed light on both perceptions but
also
 my point of view will be elaborated in the conclusion.
To begin
 with,
the
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cutting-edge
technology
 has become a big part of our
lives
 to the point where
people
 can not imagine life without it.
This
 is because
people
 say that it is taking control over their
lives
. To elucidate
further
, if
people
 indulge
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themselves
themseleves
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themselves
 in
the
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technology
, there will be almost no physical interaction with other
people
 which can lead to adverse ramifications.
For instance
, a recent study has shown that the 90% of
people
 use mobile phones as
platform
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a platform
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 to connect with
people
 which
as a result
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 their confidence level.
On the other hand
, society
claim
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 that
technology
 particularly
internet
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the internet
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 advantages are more than its disadvantages. Due to
this
 modern
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technology
teachnology
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technology
people
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lives
has
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have
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 become
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convenient
convienent
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convenient
. They can buy things at
a
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 touch of
the
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 button and gain access to information from all over the world.
Moreover
,
technology
 has
play
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 a crucial role in schools. Education is now easier than before due to
advance
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technology
 and every child has access to it. To illustrate, students were able to study at home during Covid due to the
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technology
techology
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technology
. In conclusion, according to my perspective,
technology
 have more positive points and if
people
 use it to improve the world
instead
 of
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overusing
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over using
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 it, it can be
good
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a good
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 development.
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