Last month you had a holiday overseas where you stayed with a friend. He/She has just sent you some photos of your holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● thank him/her for the photos and for the holiday ● explain why you didn’t write earlier ● invite them to come and stay with you
Dear Adam,
I hope
this
letter finds you in good health and in the best of spirits. I have received a few photos from you of our vacation in Italy. It was the most wonderful vacation of my life. I really enjoyed your company and the serene holiday location. Moreover
, the food of Italy was relentlessly good.
I am sorry for not writing to you earlier, as I took a month's rest from my work, thus
, I had a lot to clear out. I have just received some photographs, I found the pictures of our last
10 days' travel missing. If possible can you please forward me the remaining pics?
I have decided to commemorate the 30th anniversary of my parents. Thus
, I thought to arrange a small gathering next month. I would be obliged if you and your family joined us and congratulated them.
Waiting to see you soon.
Yours loving,
Navneet Kaur.Submitted by ss6802125 on
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task achievement
You have done a great job in addressing all parts of the task. To improve further, you could elaborate slightly more in the second paragraph about why you were busy after your return.
coherence cohesion
While your letter is generally well-organized, ensure that each paragraph introduces a single clear idea. For instance, combining the reason you did not write earlier with a request for photos might be improved by giving each its own paragraph.
coherence cohesion
Your greeting and closing are both warm and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
task achievement
You have used a suitable and friendly tone throughout the letter, which is perfect for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is logically structured, with a clear progression from thanking your friend to explaining why you didn't write earlier, and ending with the invitation.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite