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Whether or not someone achieve their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People mostly get to their goals by luck. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion, because I think that achieving your aim is a long way and you only come to a finish if you work really hard. Successful society has reached their goals not because they are lucky, but because they worked really hard and might have a lot of severity in their lives. Maybe luck had some impact
however
 the key factor is perseverance.
For example
, most rich and successful communities, had a difficult way to triumph, with a lot of failures and disappointment, but they always worked really hard and achieved their aims.
Also
, there may be a lot of failures on the way to the aim, but it is important not to give up
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 because life will get you tired
however
 believing in yourself is very important. After uncertain tries and falls, and identifying all mistakes, people come to their goal.
For instance
, most of the great businessmen suffered and opened many unsuccessful projects, before their one business started to work. In conclusion, luck is a minor factor in achieving the aims, and the main key is to work hard and have good perseverance.
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