Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of arts by using a computer. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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No one can deny the fact of the importance of historical items and the art workplace for each country . Some individuals believe that no need for galleries and museums , they believe that technology gives them what they want to see . I agree with

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I will support my opinion with examples .

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with , nowadays worldwide technology is advanced more than at any time before , we can read and see anything we request by only using our small smartphones.

Furthermore

, a few years ago we used to visit workplaces of arts the historical places over the world by travelling as tourists , but most people these days are satisfied with only seeing the old building via Youtube applications or others .

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, one of the most famous bloggers on Youtube his name is Ahmad ads ,he is using his channel to show people the places he had visited over the world , which led him to obtain more followers and more money , and ,watchers all are for free by an app. I believe in

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opinion , why I need to see the ancient objects and pay for them despite I can see them for free on my phone .

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others believe that travelling and be as a tourist is an enjoyable time , and they like to pay for that .

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, it is a kind of habit for some people to visit museums and galleries , taking a picture of those items and those artists .

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, the traditional museum in Jordan is open monthly on Friday for free to

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in order to increase awareness of their country's history and

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encourage them to publish about its ancient objects . in conclusion , I believe that no need to visit closed places or arts workplaces in order to see the historical instruments or arts ,

however

; our technology is very developed and I can use it to watch and know about anything anywhere on

this

planet .

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