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Band 6.5

Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. How far do you share this viewpoint?

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It is said that
people
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 have to give a fixed percentage of their salaries to charities. It seems to me maybe
people
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 want to spend their salaries in another way. And no one can ask
people
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 to give a fixed
amount
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 of their
money
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 for donation. And I will explain why in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, it is not true to say everybody should donate a fixed
amount
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 of their
wages
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 to support charity. Because
people
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 do not have the same incomes and maybe some have got less or much
wages
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.
For example
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, some
people
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 have a little
amount
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 of salary and maybe they need their
wages
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 more in their daily
life
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.
Secondly
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, some
people
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 want to save their
money
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 for their future
life
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 and want to spend their
wages
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 for their own
life
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.
For instance
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,
people
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 tend to have a decent lifestyle based on the
money
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 that they earn so they can not give a fixed part of it to support charity. It might be said that if everybody had to help a fixed part of their salaries to support charity, societies could give better facilities to the poor.
However
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, I disagree with
this
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 idea because it can have negative effects on personal
life
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. In conclusion, it is not advisable to ask everyone for donating a fixed
amount
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 of their income to charities because they may have a small
amount
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 of
money
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 which is essential for their own
life
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 or even they need their
wages
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 for other purposes.
Although
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 it may be suitable to help charities it depends on
people
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’s circumstances.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic equality
  • Wealth gap
  • Redistributing resources
  • Social responsibility
  • Mandatory donations
  • Financial strain
  • Voluntary donations
  • Morality
  • Ethics
  • Efficient use of resources
  • Sporadic contributions
  • Implementation challenges
  • Compliance
  • Fixed amount
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