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Everybody should donate a fixed amount of their income to support charity. How far do you share this viewpoint?

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It is said that
people
 have to give a fixed percentage of their salaries to charities. It seems to me maybe
people
 want to spend their salaries in another way. And no one can ask
people
 to give a fixed
amount
 of their
money
 for donation. And I will explain why in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, it is not true to say everybody should donate a fixed
amount
 of their
wages
 to support charity. Because
people
 do not have the same incomes and maybe some have got less or much
wages
.
For example
, some
people
 have a little
amount
 of salary and maybe they need their
wages
 more in their daily
life
.
Secondly
, some
people
 want to save their
money
 for their future
life
 and want to spend their
wages
 for their own
life
.
For instance
,
people
 tend to have a decent lifestyle based on the
money
 that they earn so they can not give a fixed part of it to support charity. It might be said that if everybody had to help a fixed part of their salaries to support charity, societies could give better facilities to the poor.
However
, I disagree with
this
 idea because it can have negative effects on personal
life
. In conclusion, it is not advisable to ask everyone for donating a fixed
amount
 of their income to charities because they may have a small
amount
 of
money
 which is essential for their own
life
 or even they need their
wages
 for other purposes.
Although
 it may be suitable to help charities it depends on
people
’s circumstances.
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