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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course.

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I was a student in your Chinese cooking class
last
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 month, and I got a questionnaire from you for some feedback on
this
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 class, so I'm happy to offer some help. Your class is interesting and all the classmates have a good time during the
course
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. What's more, thanks to your teaching, I have gained a lot of practice and knowledge of Chinese food. After the
course
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, I cooked for my family to practice every day as I prepared to start my own business, mainly serving Chinese food. I'm going to start a great food party for my friends, and get some advice from them.
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 I got excellent general cooking skills from the school, I noticed that there is a huge demand for Shanghai cuisine, which your
course
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 didn't provide. So I recommend that your school start a new
course
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 to teach local cuisine. Above are all my ideas on how your school can do better, and a big thank you to you. Hope to hear from you soon.
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