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Today more people are travelling than ever before Whis is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

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With the advance in technology the means of travelling whether it be by road,sea or air has improved a
lot
. It is thought that people are travelling now more than ever before. Let us have a thorough discussion in order to draw a conclusion as to why
this
 is the case and what benefits travelling has for the traveller.
Firstly
, a
lot
 of efforts have been put in by scientists to reduce
travel
 time by inventing vehicles or planes able to achieve higher speeds with safety. Even the planes now come as double decker which means more no of passengers can trip at the same time. Due to
this
 travelling has become a
lot
 easier and more convenient than before.
Secondly
, companies are now expanding over a wide geographical area to establish their footprint in new markets and increase their sales.
This
 leads to more
travel
 for the cooperate management to attend meetings and explore opportunities by travelling to other places. For ,instance our Head of Department travels weekly to each branch in the country to lead face-to-face meetings and manage the work going on.
Moreover
, frequent
travel
although
 it might tire travellers comes with its own benefits
such
 as exploring new areas or getting good discounts for using the same means of
travel
. For ,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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instance I
travel
 a
lot
 by Saudi Airlines for company work around the region. I have enrolled in a membership which gives me points on every flight. After achieving the required miles, I am able to redeem a full ticket with them. To sum up, due to advances in technology, cooperateexpansion in other regions and good discounts by flight operators on frequent
travel
, people tend to
travel
 more than before.
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