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Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does it cost ? What are some possible solutions?

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There has been much discussion revolving
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 the issue that in today’s society more and more
people
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 need to compete with young
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 for the same jobs. In
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 essay, I will present what problems it causes and the solutions for
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 phenomenon. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that the community in which we live
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is always changing, there is a constant generational change. Every year students finish
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 and
universities
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,
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 means yearly new workers enter and are available to the market. The
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 is that these new potential employees are closer to modern technology that
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 to be used every day
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 work.
The young
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people
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 come with
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 knowledge, and
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 is an advantage over old workers. In order to have an effective older worker, the employer must retrain them,
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 costs money and time for companies because they need to organize various conferences for training their employees. It is more beneficial to hire a new person who already knows
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.
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, the employer can pay less for a new worker who has less experience. Regarding the
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 of older
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 being replaced by
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youngsters
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,youngsters
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 the doable
solutions
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 is that
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problem
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 should be solved by the government. The
administrations
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administration
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 must arrange
trainings
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training
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 for the elderly. By doing
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 the government creates opportunities for both sides. Companies save
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time and do not have to fire their experienced workers. For employees is essential to save their job places. On balance, I would assert that the
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 of employers choosing
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young
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instead
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 of older is a serious
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problem
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 as well the government should be more involved.
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