Nowadays more and more people have to compete with young people for the same jobs. What problems does it cost ? What are some possible solutions?

There has been much discussion revolving
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the issue that in today’s society more and more
people
need to compete with young
people
for the same jobs. In
this
essay, I will present what problems it causes and the solutions for
this
phenomenon. The primary factor we need to take into consideration is that the community in which we live
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is always changing, there is a constant generational change. Every year students finish
schools
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and
universities
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,
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means yearly new workers enter and are available to the market. The
problem
is that these new potential employees are closer to modern technology that
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to be used every day
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work.
The young
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people
come with
this
knowledge, and
this
is an advantage over old workers. In order to have an effective older worker, the employer must retrain them,
this
costs money and time for companies because they need to organize various conferences for training their employees. It is more beneficial to hire a new person who already knows
this
.
Also
, the employer can pay less for a new worker who has less experience. Regarding the
problem
of older
people
being replaced by
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youngsters
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the doable
solutions
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is that
this
problem
should be solved by the government. The
administrations
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must arrange
trainings
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for the elderly. By doing
this
the government creates opportunities for both sides. Companies save
their
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time and do not have to fire their experienced workers. For employees is essential to save their job places. On balance, I would assert that the
problem
of employers choosing
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young
people
instead
of older is a serious
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problem
as well the government should be more involved.
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