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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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This
 article claims that fast
food
 is becoming part of our life and introduces a question about who should take responsibility for
this
, the government or every person. On the one hand, fast
food
 is just a good decision for our fast tempo of life. We all live in a stressful world and spend a lot of energy every day, that's why we found new ways to replenish our resources and fast
food
 is the easiest method to do
this
. But
on the other hand
, most of us have a sitting lifestyle and just a few people do sports and go to the gym because they are too busy.
Also
, fast
food
 includes plenty of calories. It is exactly what our brain loves, after all the years of evolution made our search for full-energy
food
 to survive and that
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is why
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is why
 we resist our desire so hard. To sum up these factors fast
food
 brings us a lot of bad circumstances.
Therefore
 people who love
this
 type of
food
 get a high weight, have problems with the heart and that’s a really common case nowadays. The worst of it is that amount of these cases still grows. In my opinion society and government have to bring equal responsibility. Perhaps the most effective way to solve
this
 problem is if the government reduces prices on healthy
food
, the business sector makes gym membership more affordable, and other people start to translate the benefits of a healthy lifestyle for everyone and how fast
food
 destroys your body and makes your life shorter.
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