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The best way to plan a holiday is by not planning at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Many
people
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 claim that the only plan individuals should do for enjoyable vacations is not plan at all. The fact that planning organisations are stressful and holidays should be the times that
people
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 do whatever they desire freely, I disagree with
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statement.
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, it is obvious that a majority of professionals have been making plans since their childhood to find time to care for everything. Every
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 of the day is already planned for those
people
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.
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, those
people
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 should be relaxed during their vacations by enjoying the moment without time schedules.
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, making plans for holidays cannot provide them with the freedom which they are in need.
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 why so many
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 do not bother to plan travel.
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, without plans, travellers would feel thrilled coming from unknown activities. As everybody said, ignorance is a blessing in
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 circumstances. If adventurers do not know how much money they spend there will be no reason to worry during a holiday.
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, if there is no time limit,
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 can sleep how much they want during vacations without the hesitation of being late somewhere. On top of that, anyone who wants to explore a foreign culture should act randomly while eating and walking. To put it simply, holidays should not be planned only be enjoyed by the members of society since many
people
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 have tight schedules during the day. So, it is the ability to act randomly that those
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 need.
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 why I agree with the statement.
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