With increased of global demand of oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree?
In the whole world
needs
Fix the agreement mistake
need
of
Change preposition
for
gas
and oil are
growing day by day and the regions that are still not discovered with more possessing should shard to get these things. I completely agree with Correct subject-verb agreement
is
this
opinion and this
essay will show the economic point of view of a country
and how much upgraded
Add a hyphen
much-upgraded
machineries
is useful.
To commence with, there are many poor countries in the world with a lot of Change the wording
machinery
types of machinery
pieces of machinery
source
of oil and Fix the agreement mistake
sources
gas
that are still not invented because of their lack of knowledge about this
, and the economic situation of that country
is also
not that much
high so it was difficult for them to start these process of discoveries. Correct quantifier usage
apply
For instance
, Burundi is a small, poor country
of
Africa and they had a ton of Change preposition
in
sources
in that case if any first level
Add a hyphen
first-level
country
like America and Australia etc. if they
can come forward to open up these resources from Burundi Correct pronoun usage
apply
then
it will be a great scope to solve this
consistency.
Secondly
, for lacking of
upgraded Remove the preposition
apply
equipment’s
many more Change noun form
equipment
medium range
Add a hyphen
medium-range
country
could not release these Fix the agreement mistake
countries
sources
that are already discovered. For example
, Bangladesh is a developing country
and there are recently some gas
sources
found in village
Correct article usage
the village
area
but they could not derive it. If it is possible to manage or import any Fix the agreement mistake
areas
kinds
of upgrade machine for collecting these resources, Fix the agreement mistake
kind
then
obviously that will be a
get support to solve Remove the article
apply
Add an article
a problem
the problem
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
that
related to that issue.
To conclude, for solving the need that Correct pronoun usage
apply
Correct article usage
an increased
increased
Replace the word
increase
of
oil and Change preposition
in
gas
can be solved by providing an
economical support to poor Remove the article
apply
country
by Fix the agreement mistake
countries
rich
where there is a source Correct article usage
the rich
and
another option is by using Correct word choice
apply
some
upgraded Correct determiner usage
an
machine
Fix the agreement mistake
machines
it
is possible to release some Correct pronoun usage
which
sources
that are already discovered.Submitted by koly2751 on
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