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some people believe that the extinction of animals is a natural process and human should not intervene. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #extinction #animals #process
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This
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 graphic shows changes in the
consumption
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 of 3 food types between 1975 and 2000. Products are fruits, sugar and ice cream. Well, on
this
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 graphic we see that
consumption
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 of sugar had been
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decreasing
 from 1975 to 2000.
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 the same time,
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consumption
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the consumption
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 of ice cream is slowly growing over
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time. Fresh fruits have broken graphs. From 1975 to 1980 and from 1985 to nowadays it had been growing up, but from 80 to 85 it was decreasing. So, in my
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 everything growing up because
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a number
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 of people has
growing
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 up. And nowadays in
2022
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 we have more than 8 billion people. And everybody needs food, so
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 reason
consumption
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 will
be grow
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 up.
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