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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with is opinion. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviours to children?

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The charts illustrate the projected changes in
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capacity
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 in gigawatts (GW) in 2040 as opposed to the percentage of
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capacity
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 in 2015. Overall, the
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capacity
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 is predicted to significantly increase. Fossil fuels were widely used in the initial
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 but are expected to decrease in the future, whereas other power capacities will either decrease insignificantly or will considerably increase. From the graph, it is clear that usage of fossil fuels was common because of its
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 level, recording 64% in 2015, but
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 is expected to change by the
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 2040,
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, there will be a decrease by a fifth of the 2015 figure. As can be seen from the graph, other renewables had a volume of over one
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a fifth in 2015,
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, there will be an insignificant drop of 2% in 2040. With regards to wind, nuclear and solar power
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, there will be a slight fall in nuclear power volume by 2040, just 1% less, and a dramatic increase in the
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 of solar
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, from 2% to nearly 20% by the
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 2040, as well as a 100% rise in the
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 of wind from 5% to 12% in the projected
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