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Many working people get little or no excercise either during tge workinf days or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many working people not to get enough excerise? What can be done about this problem.

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In the modern world, a myriad overpopulation is a majority problem.
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,
employees
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 would lack time to exercise and forget their
health
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 due to fulfilling their job requirements.
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 essay will discuss these issues and provide some possible solutions to address them.
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 of all, the myriad overpopulation has grown quickly in developing countries for decades.
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 tendency will let a huge number of workers who spend much time on work fulfilling the bosses' expectations and make an unbalanced status for them.
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, they do not have enough hours to do physical exercises.
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, some Asia communities request their workers if they have to be prolonged for a long period to accomplish some tasks, they will get more wages.
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, some
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 have to have a quality of life and earn more money to afford their daily basic needs.
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, they miss an active lifestyle and may cause some illnesses
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 as obesity, diabetes and chronic pain etc.
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, there are some measures that can be taken.
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 with, the master of companies can hold some campaigns or events about physical days, which can encourage their subordinates to need an active life in order to be a strong body to overcome different challenges.
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, the authority of communities should arrange a
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 check for their
employees
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.
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 could let their workers aware of their
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 and put them in need of a healthy lifestyle. In a nutshell, following the statements and suggestions, many
employees
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 would lack time to exercise and forget their
health
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 due to fulfilling their job requirements.
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, the bosses and individuals should take action to ensure that it will be a healthy city in the future.
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