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Some people argue that technological inventions like mobile phones, are making people less socially interactive. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some claim that technological innovations
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 as mobile phones are reducing social interaction among
people
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. In my opinion, technologically advanced gadgets
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 as mobile phones, tablets, and smartwatches are isolating
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 within four walls. The dependency of
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 on these advancements will have serious repercussions on their health and relationships in near future. Human beings are social animals whose existence revolves around interaction with their peers.
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, advancement in machinery hints at a slight air of menace to the well-being of social species. Various platforms, namely Facebook, WhatsApp and skype aimed at connecting the community are rather in reality cornering humans within a box. The effect of
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 on the health of an individual is well discussed in recent clinical literature. It is shown that the effect of scrolling down through the internet nine hours a day can eventually lead to blurred vision, migraine and other health-related problems. Some folk support the opinion that the very same technology helped in connecting long-lost friends . It helped
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 to stay in touch even though separated by distance.
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, parents are able to talk with their son who is across the sea with a finger's touch. It has overshadowed the days when postmen used to deliver letters to pass information. In fact, convenience and speed at which information delivers is a byproduct of technology. As the saying goes, a coin has two sides, everything that exists in
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 world has both positive and negative aspects. It is up to us how to make good out of something. I would like to conclude by saying that technology can be used judiciously without taking a toll on the well-being of
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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