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What are advantage and disadvantages of immigration?

#advantage #immigration
There are many negative and positive reasons for immigrating. Progressing at the job is an advantage and increasing psychological
issues
 is a disadvantage.
Initially
, some
people
 leave their country to find a better job
moreover
 the new position is accepted by the employer. Having good facilities in life might bring about a growing request for jobs. For ,example Canadian government find that any
people
 who send a document to apply are willing to have positions in
this
 country's company.
This
 person not only has the best job but
also
 an increased salary. In the past ,years some
people
 who have unemployment on the other and want to immigrate to Canada were successful in
this
 plan. On the other disadvantage has some reasons.some of them who are immigrants might have many psychological
issues
. University oxford finds that after 2 years in emigrate, raising mind
issues
 about 30% of these
people
.
Moreover
 not only faring
this
 family but
also
 making new friends result in increasing mental problems and many
people
 live with many problems
such
 as mental
issues
, psychological psychological problem, mental
issues
 and many others. In conclusion, in some societies, immigrants might have part of problems
such
 as mental
issues
. They are killing to new work for having a better life. On the other ,hand some of them spend every time for find to work and applying the process. it is hoped
this
 problem decline in those communities in immigration with having a schedule and using imigiret consultants for
this
 goal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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