In the past, people used to travel abroad to look for many differences from their home country. Nowadays, cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?
Undoubtedly, cities around the world have been suffering influences from outside, and as
result
, Correct article usage
a result
places
became
too similar to each other and lost their identity. Wrong verb form
have become
Besides
, globalism is opening the market and many countries
are making
business with each other, and the population are accessing imported Verb problem
doing
products
easiest.
Firstly
, the main reason is globalization which provides exchanges between people from many places
. For instance
, I've been to South Africa and there I had wonderful experiences such
as visiting a famous vinery in the mountain around, and I had a candle dinner with my wife in recognised restaurants. In fact, the point is, I felt as my last
travel to Europe, where I visited similar places
as I could enjoy in South Africa. To be honest, I'm not an expert and I'm bringing up a fact about those who immigrated to another land and took with them their unique style, and obviously, applied it there.
Secondly
, the open market provides
companies to export and import Verb problem
allows
products
from many places
. For example
, China has been making
business in many Verb problem
doing
countries
around the world and no matter what you buy, probably is written the phrase by China. Besides
, another example is products
by Apple CO, according to
an article, only North Corea, Cuba, and other communist countries
don't commercialize these products
, and as result
, around 90% of Correct article usage
a result
countries
on the earth are using an iPhone, Macbook, and so.
In my opinion, Rephrase
on.
this
guarantees equality for humanity.
To conclude
, the open market is vital for the economy, and it can improve folks' development, however
, authorities should work hard to boost the financial situation without losing their own style.Submitted by murilo.siqueira2012 on
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