In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. what do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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Health
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is a vital part of our lives. Factors affecting our
health
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are either due to individual choices,
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as eating healthy and working out
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or due to structural causes whether it is easy or hard to get the necessary
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care services. There are other factors, like genetics, low activity, and fitness, that together with increasing
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levels
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of weight cause an increase in the
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of
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obesity and its related
health
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problems
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. Fast
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and its
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availability
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one of the major causes of
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health-related
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health related
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problems
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because fast
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contain
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tremendous
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tremendous
amounts of calories and fats which have no
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value rather than
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defeating
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feeding
hunger. These excessive
caloris
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calories
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eventually
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eventually
will be stored as fat in our bodies, which will cause significant
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problems
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to our bodies. According to a
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research
reasearch
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conducted in
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Europe
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and North Africa 75% of those who died because of atherosclerosis, the main
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to
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their disease was
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eating
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eatings
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eating
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a lot
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a lot
of amount of fast
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. Solving
this
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problem require
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a lot
alot
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a lot
of effort
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in
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awareness,
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teaching children the
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of being healthy and
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sure they understand it,
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subsequently
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this
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will increase the chance of them being
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healthy person.
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Also
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we must add
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taxes to the fast
food
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restaurants
resturents
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restaurants
and it will be directed to make training
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and gyms.
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Moreover
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the
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government
goverment
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government
should
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encourage
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encourage
healthy foods business and support them. In conclusion, obesity and lower physical activity and fitness are major
problems
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in our society. The major cause of obesity is eating fast
food
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and to solve these
problems
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we need to
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increase
incease
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increase
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awareness and increase taxes
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the
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fast
food
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restaurants
resturants
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restaurants
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and support the healthy foods business.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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