Overpopulation in many major urban centers around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this? How can this problem be solved?
In
modern
world, many countries have a common challenge associated with traffic congestion, so government should impose a new Add an article
the modern
tax
rate for car
owners which is heavier than the last
one and then
transform all these tax
to invest Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
a
better public transportation in cities. In Remove the article
apply
this
essay
we will explain both benefits and drawbacks of Add a comma
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this
measures.
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these
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with, increasing tax
for private
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a private
the private
car
can justify in two main reason
. Change to a plural noun
reasons
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, decreasing in quantity
of vehicles because the price of Add an article
the quantity
a quantity
that
is consisted
of Change to the active voice
consists
has consisted
tax
. And this
method can make people
do
not Unnecessary verb
apply
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want
wan
to purchase it, by doing Correct your spelling
want
this
the number of Add an article
the car
car
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cars
in
the road Change preposition
on
are
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apply
decline
automatically. Another point is rising in Wrong verb form
declining
usage
of public transport owning to they are cheaper than having Add an article
the usage
car
and Add an article
a car
also
more convenient. Correct your spelling
Moreover
More over
if citizens in Correct your spelling
Moreover
city
switch to Correct article usage
the city
use
public transport Change the verb form
using
such
as bus
, Fix the agreement mistake
buses
sky
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and sky
train
they will reduce Fix the agreement mistake
trains
emission
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the emission
gas
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of gas
which
produced by Correct pronoun usage
apply
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the car
car
. On top of that, society can have Fix the agreement mistake
cars
a
good air quality and Remove the article
apply
healthy
ecosystem, Correct article usage
a healthy
therefore
burdens of hospital
and doctor Fix the agreement mistake
hospitals
are
plummet too.
Unnecessary verb
apply
On the other hand
, life in rural
area without Add an article
a rural
car
Add an article
a car
are
Change the verb form
is
the
major challenge for rural dwellers. Correct article usage
a
Firstly
, they are limited public transport which are
not cover all Change the verb form
is
around
the areas. Change preposition
apply
Secondly
, in Add an article
the countryside
countryside
the journey is longer than in cities, so Add a comma
,countryside
people
can not travel without automobile
. Add an article
an automobile
Furthermore
, imposing heavy tax related
inequality Add a hyphen
tax-related
issue
. Fix the agreement mistake
issues
Consequently
, normal people
with normal income can not afford it only rich people
who can pay high tax
can Fix the agreement mistake
taxes
buy
.
In conclusion, the Correct pronoun usage
itbuy
car
tax
is
launched by Unnecessary verb
apply
government
are having both advantages about Add an article
the government
ameliorate
traffic trouble and environmental trouble and disadvantages Change the verb form
ameliorating
associate
with the gap between Wrong verb form
associated
rich
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a rich
person
and poor Fix the agreement mistake
people
person
in Fix the agreement mistake
people
country
.Add an article
the country
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