Parents often give children everything ask for and do what they like. Is it good for children? What is the consequence when they grow up.

In recent years, it is considered crucial to
fulfill
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demands
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the demands
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of
children
as it shows love and
care
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cares
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for them.
Although
it is very good to provide everything yet fulfilling every demand can become a cause
of
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careless attitude among
children
. According to my point of view, there should be
check
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and
balance
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in
upbringing
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the upbringing
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children
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of children
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otherwise
it will lead them to develop a selfish
personality
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personalities
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. It is needless to say that in
this
competitive era
parents
are doing their best to bring up
children
, but the notion of providing everything should be considered wrong. It is the nature of
children
to desire
things
which they do not have,
even
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and even
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after having those
things
they do not care about
these
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them
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.
For instance
, some
children
have
enormous
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an enormous
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wish to get play station because they are impressed by their
fellow’s
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fellow
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gadgets, after having play stations they lose interest and demand something
such
as mobile
phone
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phones
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, tablets and
laptop
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laptops
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.
Consequently
, they are impressed by their surroundings and try to get each and every luxury which sometimes their
parents
cannot afford. By fulfilling every
demands
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demand
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rather than valuing people and societies,
children
are learning to love materialistic
things
.
On the other hand
, giving every luxury to
children
can damage their
personality
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personalities
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. Because it is human nature
if
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that if
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he gets everything without effort, he never values its importance.
In addition
to it, there should be a reward system for
children
so that they behave well to get something. Bringing up
children
is not a piece of cake for
parents
, to exemplify; it is noticed that
children
of financially affluent families are more indulged in social evils as compared to
middle class
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middle-class
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families. The main reason behind
this
ethical gap is their financial status and their
parents
provide them according to their
demands
. Shortly, societies
who
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that
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never run for materialistic
things
are no place to live other than heaven. To sum up, providing everything to
children
might not be fruitful to some extent as
children
think it is their right that their
demands
get fulfilled.
Furthermore
, they should be taught to put effort
for
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into
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getting something so that they can lead a happy and prosperous life on their own
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