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Parents who send their children to study abroad. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

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Colleges and
universities
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 are available all around the globe. Many parents nowadays, especially in developing countries, decide to send their children to foreign countries for their higher studies. While studying abroad has lots of advantages but people often forget the disadvantages of the same. In
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 I will present both pros and cons of getting an education at a foreign university.
Students
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 who decide to pursue their higher education abroad have options to choose from the world's top
universities
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 and colleges. Most of these institutions were established centuries ago and are well-known throughout the entire world.
Students
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 who graduate from these
universities
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 have higher chances of getting a good job than those who graduate from common colleges. England, Canada and Australia and among the top destinations for
students
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 when it comes to studying abroad. Fees of
universities
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 in these countries are much higher and in most cases not affordable for most foreign
students
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. While studying abroad, these
students
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 face many difficulties, especially in the
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 few months. They find themself alone, far away from their family and friend. They have to bear their expenses, pay university fees, home or hostel rent etc. Studying abroad is not everyone's cup of tea. Some people can afford it, whereas, others can't. Some parents force their children to go abroad for studying not knowing the reality. Every country should develop and invest more in educational institutions in their homeland so
students
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 don't have to go abroad.
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