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The best way to solve the world’s environmental problem is to increase the price of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world’s #price #fuel
There is a controversial perspective heating a debate
whether
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 the optimal solution to the universal’s surrounding trouble is the upsurge
of
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 the cost of fuel. I partially do not have a consensus with
this
 idea. Obviously, increasing the
price
 of fuel is not the optimal tactic to solve the environment. In spite of
an
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inelastic demand for oil, all
vehicles
 run on gas.
Thus
, even if no matter how much the cost of gasoline dramatically climbs, citizens still need to
purchase
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.
For example
,
although
 the
price
 of gasoline is hiked exponentially by Vietnam’s government, the need to work and gain knowledge at school becomes an indispensable demand.
As a result
, going up the
gasoline’s
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price
 makes no difference in declining the number of
transportations
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transportation
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.
Therefore
, surging the
fuel’s
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fuel
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price
 is not an effective way with a view to
protecting
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 the environment. While
an
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 ineffective impact of the growth in
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fuel’s
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price
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prices
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 is widely acknowledged, there is a wealth of more far-reaching alternatives to address environmental issues. Running on renewable energy, electric
vehicles
 do not release greenhouse gas and have influences on the environment’s air quality.
For instance
, Vinfast, which is a car make-prestigious in Vietnam, has an environmentally-friendly electric transports system. It not only satisfies the people’s needs but
also
 does not have any bad impact on the air quality.
Thus
, utilizing
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electric
vehicles
 is one of
effective
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 approaches to deteriorate carbon dioxide, which is able to protect the surrounding. In conclusion, using electric
vehicles
,
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instead
 of hiking the
price
 of fuel, is one of the proper solutions to resolve the
universal's
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 surrounding issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fuel consumption
  • renewable energy
  • emissions
  • electric vehicles
  • low-income families
  • commute
  • fuel-efficient technologies
  • public transport infrastructure
  • global disparity
  • developing nations
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable practices
  • economic impact
  • conservation efforts
  • environmental sustainability
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