Some people think that students should play more team sports, such as football and volleyball, rather than individual sports, such as running and swimming. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #students #team #sports #football #volleyball

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resent

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years, few humans strongly believe that

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adolescent

adolescents

adlolesent

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adolescents

need to play more

team

sports

, like basketball and football rather than individual

sports

such

as box and

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swimming

swimimng

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swimming

. I concur wholeheartedly

this

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idea because when there are

team

games. It is more effective for students.

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, playing

team

sports

encourages people to unite. On the one hand, there are many advantages to playing with a

team

First

of all, when they play

team

sports

, they learn

consruence

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congruence

which helps

then

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in their future.

Also

, there will be different people in the

team

and learning their character will help them to be friendly and their friends will

also

increase. They

also

always support each other in

team

games.

For example

, a hockey game is a

team

game in which the participants always support each other and can understand each other even

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their eyes.

On the other hand

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an individual

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individual

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individuals

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can be more successful than those who participate in

team

sports

because they work harder and harder on themselves. They

also

learn to be independent and make independent decisions for themselves.

For example

, boxing is

also

considered an individual sport. Nowadays, many boxing champions are emerging from my country because they worked hard and worked tirelessly.

This

greatly helped the development of

sports

in our country.

In addition

, the reputation of the country rests on his shoulders, and that's why they always try to win in

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computation

competition

compellation

compatation

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competition

. In conclusion, it can be said that all types of

sports

are useful for teenagers

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because many countries are developing through

sports

and are known to the whole world. But

team

sports

are more interesting and more successful.

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