Recent research suggests that excessive use of the internet over prolonged periods of time may negatively affect some cognitive functions, particularly attention and short-term memory.' (Source: The Ohio State University Wexner Medical Center). Some people say that the internet affects our intelligence. To what extent do you agree? Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own personal opinion.

There are controversial perspectives heating up a debate over the impact of making use of the
internet
. While some claim that using the web significantly
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our
intelligence
, the opposite makes a statement that the
internet
does not have a considerable impact on humans. In my opinion, while the former is valid to some extent, I consider myself an advocate of the latter. Without a shadow of a doubt,
undesirable
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affects
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which
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that
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using the
internet
brings
for
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brain
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is a
thing
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things
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that should not be ignored. Being too dependent on the
internet
will make humans become passive in real life.
For example
, Google is an application that
help
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everyone search everything easily with thousands of results with just 1 click.
However
, relying on google is the reason why
people
read
less
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books and remember
less
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facts.
Hence
, our brain turns out to be stagnated.
Furthermore
, using the
Internet
too much will make
people
less willing to make friends. In my opinion, working with online computers all the time is one of the
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why humans become less active and our
intelligence
is affected as a consequence.
On the other hand
, The
Internet
plays
a
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insignificant role in improving our
intelligence
.
First
, the
Internet
assist
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us to make better decisions, based on information available in
short
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period of time.
Second
, young kids can use the
internet
or educational apps in order to train
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thinking and enhance their knowledge.
For example
, Duolingo is
an
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free app for every young person to practice thinking and learn a new language, which is a type of
intelligence
. From my point of view, the web can actually improve
humankind
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intelligence
, depending on how
people
utilize it. To conclude, whether using the
internet
affect our
intelligence
depends on how
people
perceive the web.
On the contrary
, in
this
day and age, the
Internet
actually can bring tremendous benefits for
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rather than the undesirable influences that it is known for.
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