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Advances in science and technology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better lime to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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The advancement in
science
 and
technology
 in the
last
 few years has been massive. It is said that we are living in a golden era where
science
 has helped
mankind
 in every field and made human
life
 easier than ever. A rapid increase in the development of medicine has been made.
Today
 medicine can heal diseases like cancer, COVID, influenza etc making it more powerful than ever. Another advancement in
technology
 has
also
 helped
mankind
 as they live their
life
.It is
also
 said that there is no better time to be alive than now. But one cannot completely agree with
this
 point.It is said that, In the past,
people
 were able to build a society far more progressive than
today
. It is said that
science
 was more evolved in the past. A lot of
technology
 used by
people
 in the past was way better than
today
. As
the
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technology
 evolved
people
 got disconnected from each other resulting in some serious
problems
 like depression, anxiety etc.
Although
science
 and
technology
 helped humans in many ways they
also
 created many
problems
 as pollution started growing more and more.
Today
mankind
's biggest problem is air pollution. With the rapid increase in buildings ,factories etc the quality of air is now lower than ever.
Although
 the development of
science
 and
technology
 is increasing the
problems
 related to it are rising as well and one can say that
today
's medicine might help
mankind
 live a longer
life
 by delaying death but the
problems
 are created by
technology
 itself .
Today
 the average human
life
 index is 70 years compared to the past
people
 tend to live longer than their
life
 index was around 90 years. So, in my opinion, it is a good era to live in but certainly not the best because
people
 were happier in past compared to
today
 .
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