Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while other believe that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

●In our modern life, it is important to know about the current affairs ongoing in
this
World. So many people try to know about the world
news
through the
television
or
radio
. Few
individuals
point out that
radio
is one of the
most
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greatest ways to get in touch with our surroundings, whereas the majority of
individuals
say that
television
is the best source for
this
purpose.
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essay will discuss both the sides of
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. From my point of
view
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televisions
are better than
radio
to get
a
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news
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news
. ●Few
individuals
say that
radio
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is
really
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good way to know about
news
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the news
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which is what is happening in the world
,
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because they do not need electricity, they just need two batteries, they are almost portable and easy to carry around.
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people take a
radio
with them when they go on a trip because they keep up with the
news
through the
radio
when they travel, especially to know the weather information, because they make their plans for tomorrow by knowing the forecast. ●The majority of
individuals
think that
televisions
are one of the best ways to keep up with the forests and new
,
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because nowadays devices are developing day by day and people try to use new devices especially
television
and
televisions
have a big screen and the events there are
live
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and attract every viewer and
and
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also
we can watch all kinds of videos animated where the events of our lives are filmed through
televisions
and even I prefer to get all my information on
television
rather than
radio
. ●In conclusion, everyone likes to receive
news
in different ways, some through
television
and others through
radio
. Everyone chooses the path
that is
convenient for them.
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