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Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while other believe that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #radio #news #television #purpose
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●In our modern life, it is important to know about the current affairs ongoing in
this
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 World. So many people try to know about the world
news
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 through the
television
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 or
radio
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. Few
individuals
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 point out that
radio
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 is one of the
most
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greatest ways to get in touch with our surroundings, whereas the majority of
individuals
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 say that
television
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 is the best source for
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 purpose.
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. From my point of
view
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televisions
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 are better than
radio
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 to get
a
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news
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news
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. ●Few
individuals
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 say that
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radio
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 is
really
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 good way to know about
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news
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the news
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 which is what is happening in the world
,
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 because they do not need electricity, they just need two batteries, they are almost portable and easy to carry around.
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 people take a
radio
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 with them when they go on a trip because they keep up with the
news
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 through the
radio
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 when they travel, especially to know the weather information, because they make their plans for tomorrow by knowing the forecast. ●The majority of
individuals
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 think that
televisions
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 are one of the best ways to keep up with the forests and new
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 because nowadays devices are developing day by day and people try to use new devices especially
television
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 and
televisions
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 have a big screen and the events there are
live
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 and attract every viewer and
and
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 we can watch all kinds of videos animated where the events of our lives are filmed through
televisions
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 and even I prefer to get all my information on
television
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 rather than
radio
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. ●In conclusion, everyone likes to receive
news
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 in different ways, some through
television
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 and others through
radio
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. Everyone chooses the path
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 convenient for them.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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