Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Today, it is a common belief that
technology
is embody
people
to be
more
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sociable
butterfly
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, whilst some think
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making
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them unsociable. In my opinion, while the development of cutting-edge
technology
, when put to proper use, can be very helpful in interacting, it can actually make us less willing to relate with
others
. Both views will be discussed in the essay.
To begin
with, recently a technological advancement has improved social skills and made the world a global village.
This
makes it possible for friends and families
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the extreme spectrum of the world to get in touch with each other. It has basically taken away the physical barrier that might be created
as a result
of geographical location and
also
effected
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in
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our
communicate
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skills.
For example
, you
able
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to
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or via video calls with your friend, who
live
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in another country due to modern
technology
, namely social media ( «Instagram», «WhatsApp» and so on).
Moreover
, high tech has
multitude
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of
advantage
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and nowadays that there are more opportunities to socialize due to recent
technology
.
In contrast
, many
people
are addicted to
technology
, which prevents them from socializing with
others
around them.
This
occurs because
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few exceptions,
people
are now preoccupied with watching movies on television, chatting online or playing music and video games rather than discussing at length with family members, making new friends or having face-to-face interactions with their neighbours.
For instance
, we realized that our youths prefer
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surf
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the web,
browser
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pages or
to be
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in virtual reality and it depends on young
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choices. To conclude, while
through
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the use of
technology
can make
people
socialize with
others
outside their surroundings, I am of the view that the addiction to
technology
has reduced the time available for
people
to interact with
others
in their environment.
This
has
make
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people
less sociable.
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