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In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Home
 is a kind of place where people can find peace. Nowadays individuals from some nations prefer to have
own
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their own
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house
instead
 of rent. From my perspective, having
a
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apply
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personal property
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has
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have
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tohave
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 list of benefits,
its
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it
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 saves
money
 and it is easy to decorate or personalize
home
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a home
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 as per our choice.
First
 of all, when anyone
have
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has
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 his personal property that actually gives him a lot of mental strength because he
don’t
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doesn’t
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 need to worry about the
money
 to pay rent. And I believe, for that reason, there is
better
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a better
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chance
 to save
money
 as well as he can use that
money
in
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for
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 some other purposes.
For example
, in Bangladesh people who owned a
house
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,house
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they
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apply
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can spend more
money
 on their children’s education or some owners save that
money
 for
future
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the future
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.
Furthermore
, there is a great
chance
 to use the savings amount
in
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for
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 business purposes.
Secondly
, a
house
owner
 has the full
rights
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right
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 to change decoration as per their direction whereas tenants always have to take permission from the
owner
 if he wants to personalize the
home
 as
his
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their
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 own thoughts.
For instance
, A
house
owner
 in Bangladesh can easily do some interior or
some
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apply
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exterior changes example
like
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apply
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adding a new balcony or changing
general
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the general
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 room to a master bedroom. To conclude, I consider that having a
home
 is much
convenient
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more convenient
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 than
to be
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being
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 a renter as there is a
chance
 to save
money
 and
also
 a
chance
 to spend them in various ways
and
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apply
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another benefit is it is more straightforward for
owner
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the owner
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 because there is an opportunity for personalization.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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