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The maintenance of public libraries is a waste of money because of compute technology that has similar functions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#maintenance #libraries #waste #money #technology #functions
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Developed digital technology can do the mission of the public
libraries
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 why maintaining them is a waste of
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I completely disagree with the statement since these
libraries
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 provide a variety of written materials and a marvellous environment to spend
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 in.
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 and foremost, keeping public
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 alive with these highly improved technological devices would not be a waste of
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 or energy because they have written books and newspapers and a great number of
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 desire to touch the pages when they are reading or studying.
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, public
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 keep all kinds of books and written materials on paper which is crucial for many students and older
people
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 who do not have the opportunity to use technological devices.
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, these
people
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 should be reaching the printed ones in one place whenever they want to study or read.
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, public
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 provide comfortable environments for readers in order to do their homework as students.
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, so many college students prefer these
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 because of their quiet environment for them to complete their research in terms of academic purposes.
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 to that, the elders who crave to find an interesting book to read while spending some leisure
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 in their retirement choose
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 too.
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, public
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 have more than one aspect for any member of society. To conclude, even if reading or researching can be done with the help of digital technology, public
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 should be considered in many aspects
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they provide and the opportunity to reach information for
people
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 who do not have technological devices.
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